Message no. 279[Branch from no. 271] Posted by Thomas Culhane (1311520071) on Wednesday, February 7, 2007 4:30pm Subject: Re: Relational Summary
Hi Dana! This relational summary is almost there. It starts out absolutely great, relating the quotes from the book to your own childhood environment, which is really neat to see. Then it is technically good in terms of quoting and linking to outside readings, but it loses its personal touch so we go from a warm and personal environment into a cold technical one. But it is a great effort, and everybody is warming to the assignments. Class: If we think of reading text as a journey through a virtual environment that influences our behavior, think of what the reader is experiencing as she visits the virtual world we paint with our words. We want to set a tone that invites as much as informs. Re-read the beginning of Dana's summary. As you read, observe how your internal environment changes (I will refer to our internal environment from now own as our INVIRONMENT to distinguish it from our ENVIRONMENT, which means "that which envelopes or surrounds us". Our IN-vironment would be "that which we surround or contain within us." As far as I know I have made this term up, so you won´t find it in the book, but who knows, maybe others have come up with it too!)
We want to see how environments affect our psychology of behavior which, to me, means how our environments affect our invironments.
When we write, we are creating a mental room and inviting people into it. So Feng Shui applies here too.
So if, throughout the journey, we pepper the technical information with personal touches, it becomes a different experience, doesn´t it?
I'll write more about this later!
Keep up the good work!